Week 6: Art Girl Rescue Part 2
"You can give up Art Girl or you can give up your life" (source)
The sun had just set, and Alex was moving silently through the maze of stucco desert houses. His objective: Invade Samu Al-Hayeed's compound and rescue his wife, the beautiful and talented Art Girl.
Alex paused as he heard the nearby shuffling of footsteps. Despite his best efforts to move stealthily, there was no way he could cover his tracks through the sand and gravel. He'd set some traps to slow down his pursuers, thin their ranks, and allow him time to think of a plan.
Alex left the house he was in and made his way through the village moving towards the town square in the center, making sure to leave behind easy-to follow tracks. Once he reached the square, he carefully retraced his steps, back to a nearby storefront. He entered the store and booby-trapped the ground floor, moving up to the second floor and taking up a sniper position looking out of the balcony.
His plan, if it worked, was to lead his pursuers into the central square, where his tracks would end. Once they were in the square, they would be several hundred feet from the nearest cover. He could pick them off one at a time. Any survivors would be forced to assault his fortified position, which had been expertly booby-trapped.
Sure enough, he heard the shuffling and crunching of feet through the sandy gravel road outside of his sniping spot. He watched the patrol carefully amble their way into the town square, still in formation, but unable to spot Alex in the window. He carefully lined up the first shot.
*BANG*
The squad leader dropped in the center of the formation, for a brief second the patrol members all crouched instinctively, giving Alex enough time to get off a second shot, this time aiming for the designated marksman of the group.
*BANG*
After a moment of panic, the remaining four members of the patrol began to run for cover. They had all collectively noticed the direction of the second shot and would begin to return fire as soon as they had reached a secure position. Alex began to track the moving targets. He hit one in the abdomen. The other was hit with a shot to the thigh, the target falling to the ground while retaining all of his mid-sprint momentum.
The remaining two squad members had made it to cover and were now returning suppressing fire in shifts, allowing the other to move up without fear of retaliation. Alex lay prone on the floor and thought of his next move. The remaining enemy combatants would be at the building in just a few seconds. He decided his best bet was to guard the stairway, using a mirror to see around the corner, and popping out as soon as an enemy was spotted, assuming either of them made it through his booby-traps.
Sure enough, the first trap was triggered. A grenade hooked up to a thin steel tripwire. The trap detonated outside of Alex's view, so he was unable to see the casualties. He continued to wait, staring intently at his mirror, waiting for a shadowy figure to amble into view. The suddenly he heard footsteps behind him.
One of the enemies had managed to climb up the balcony! The combatant opened fire and Alex threw himself down the stairs to avoid being shot. Waiting for him at the bottom was the other patrol member. Lying in a supine position with the breath knocked out of him, Alex still managed to fire off two rounds into the enemy. Alex had used up all of the ammunition in his magazine, and now the last patrol member was barreling down the staircase towards him. He drew out his combat knife and attempted to sit up to confront the attacker. The last enemy ran up and kicked Alex in the chest, forcing him back down onto the ground, he then pointed the barrel of his rifle directly at Alex's face. Alex, still laying on his back, swept the legs of the soldier just before he fired his rifle, Alex scrambled on top of the wide-eyed soldier and tried to push his combat knife into him, as the soldier used his rifle laterally as a bar to keep Alex off of him. Alex headbutted the soldier and in the soldier's temporary lapse of strength, Alex pushed the knife into his heart.
Alex rolled off of the corpse, panting heavily. He stood up and began to collect equipment from the dead soldiers. It was time to go on the offensive. Art Girl wouldn't have to wait much longer.
Author's Note:
I don't really know where I'm going with this, I guess I just wanted to write and action movie. It's sort of based of the Ramayana since the hero's motivation is saving his wife from the bad-guy, but the story is now pretty far-removed from the original. I thought it would be cool to write about one guy taking on a much larger and more well-armed enemy through wits and skill, I think we all enjoy stories about the good guys winning against insurmountable odds by employing strategy, or maybe that's just me. Anyways, until next time, I'm NitroDubbz.
R. K. Narayan: The Ramayana
http://dt.pepperdine.edu/courses/greatbooks_v/gbv-15/66697602-The-Ramayana-R-K-Narayan.pdf
*BANG*
The squad leader dropped in the center of the formation, for a brief second the patrol members all crouched instinctively, giving Alex enough time to get off a second shot, this time aiming for the designated marksman of the group.
*BANG*
After a moment of panic, the remaining four members of the patrol began to run for cover. They had all collectively noticed the direction of the second shot and would begin to return fire as soon as they had reached a secure position. Alex began to track the moving targets. He hit one in the abdomen. The other was hit with a shot to the thigh, the target falling to the ground while retaining all of his mid-sprint momentum.
The remaining two squad members had made it to cover and were now returning suppressing fire in shifts, allowing the other to move up without fear of retaliation. Alex lay prone on the floor and thought of his next move. The remaining enemy combatants would be at the building in just a few seconds. He decided his best bet was to guard the stairway, using a mirror to see around the corner, and popping out as soon as an enemy was spotted, assuming either of them made it through his booby-traps.
Sure enough, the first trap was triggered. A grenade hooked up to a thin steel tripwire. The trap detonated outside of Alex's view, so he was unable to see the casualties. He continued to wait, staring intently at his mirror, waiting for a shadowy figure to amble into view. The suddenly he heard footsteps behind him.
One of the enemies had managed to climb up the balcony! The combatant opened fire and Alex threw himself down the stairs to avoid being shot. Waiting for him at the bottom was the other patrol member. Lying in a supine position with the breath knocked out of him, Alex still managed to fire off two rounds into the enemy. Alex had used up all of the ammunition in his magazine, and now the last patrol member was barreling down the staircase towards him. He drew out his combat knife and attempted to sit up to confront the attacker. The last enemy ran up and kicked Alex in the chest, forcing him back down onto the ground, he then pointed the barrel of his rifle directly at Alex's face. Alex, still laying on his back, swept the legs of the soldier just before he fired his rifle, Alex scrambled on top of the wide-eyed soldier and tried to push his combat knife into him, as the soldier used his rifle laterally as a bar to keep Alex off of him. Alex headbutted the soldier and in the soldier's temporary lapse of strength, Alex pushed the knife into his heart.
Alex rolled off of the corpse, panting heavily. He stood up and began to collect equipment from the dead soldiers. It was time to go on the offensive. Art Girl wouldn't have to wait much longer.
Author's Note:
I don't really know where I'm going with this, I guess I just wanted to write and action movie. It's sort of based of the Ramayana since the hero's motivation is saving his wife from the bad-guy, but the story is now pretty far-removed from the original. I thought it would be cool to write about one guy taking on a much larger and more well-armed enemy through wits and skill, I think we all enjoy stories about the good guys winning against insurmountable odds by employing strategy, or maybe that's just me. Anyways, until next time, I'm NitroDubbz.
R. K. Narayan: The Ramayana
http://dt.pepperdine.edu/courses/greatbooks_v/gbv-15/66697602-The-Ramayana-R-K-Narayan.pdf
Hello Nitrodubbz,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story this week because of its action elements. I felt like I was sitting at the edge of my seat, and I really enjoyed the time you put in to the strategy Alex used through out the story. I also like the modern twist to the story because it makes it more realistic to the reader.
Hey Nitrobubbz, I really enjoyed this story because it offered a different aspect of these stories that are common each week with the modernized action-like way you wrote it. I think it allowed for something new to read and kept me entertained the entire time. I was intrigued to see what would happen next and any story that does that for me is good! Overall, I think you did a great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Nitro! Great story I really enjoyed reading it. I did have one complaint about this story. I was having a hard time understanding what was happening. I noticed this was part 2, but i really think you should have had a quick background of the story before hand. Think of it as a TL:DR (too long didn't read). This is an effective way to explain what happened for the reader. I picked this up from one of my favorite sites reddit. Anyway good story over all!
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